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Another late night inspiration from me. I honestly belive this is one of the best songs I've ever written. It has an 'Awake' by Secondhand Serenade and 'The End' by My Chemical Romance feel to it. As with all my songs, I come up with a vocal melody as I write, so all I need to do Is get someone who can play the guitar!

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She's perfection itself
In human-based form
Her face is so tender
And her smile feels so warm
And I watch from afar
And she lives her own story
I feel so alone
Can some one please hold me tonight?

And she's lying real still
But she's feeling the same
And she can't move a muscle
Or remember my name
But she knows that I love her
Like never before
And I’ll never love anyone
Like this anymore

But her eyes sing of past mistakes
I can’t get through don’t have what it takes
And I need you to be true
I’m not feeling myself
I’m not fine without you

She's not happy with what
What she turned out to be
I tell her she's perfect
She won’t believe me
She’s cutting herself
Cause she's perfect to me
I can’t let her to die
I'll just leave her to bleed

But her eyes sing of past mistakes
I can’t get through don’t have what it takes
And I need you to be true
I’m not feeling myself
I’m not fine without you

She's six feet below now
All covered in dirt
No more she'll feel helpless
No more she'll be hurt
And she's better of down there
I hope she knows why
I have no emotions
I'm not going to cry

But her eyes sing of past mistakes
I can’t get through don’t have what it takes
And I need you to be true
I’m not feeling myself
I’m not fine without you
Are the one that I love
and like stars from heaven
you fell from above
And i'm trying to agree
But I can't be good for you
Only me
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Nice!
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:cry: :cry: :cry: :cry: :cry:
soooo gooooooooood!!!!

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Its really great! I actually came up with some tunes for it in my mind, I think it'll fit an acoustic guitar.
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Just made some a little update, changed the chorus slightly, and added a bonus chorus at the end.
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tomhoppus wrote:Nice!
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