New song I wrote

[erikj9]

I haven't made a title yet, I think it's a pretty cool song.

Verse 1:
Why can't we look at the past?
How come it would never last?
But you were the one
And then it was done.
And if i could change back time,
Life be like that you were mine.
But life is just not fair.
But like you would ever care.

Chorus:
But I am just so scared.
I don't wanna lose you,
And if I do,
I would never choose to.

Verse 2:
And if the stars did dance,
You'd give me one more chance,
But that's not the case,
I'd kill myself to see your face.
And if I could kiss you,
I would never lose you.
I would crawl to my room,
and think of love at the moon

[Chorus]

Bridge:
You were never cute.
You were fucking beautiful. x4

[Chorus x2]

[HilgaMan]

^ Good post!

I think the song is decent. I like the chorus very much.

[Peterr]

ok

one word posts......
I really like the chorus. I can connect to it and that makes it special.

[tomhoppus]

nice




I like it

[Hentaiman]

nice one. nice chorus indeed.

[c4rlsson]

Looks pretty nice :D I like what I see :).

[withchappedlips]

I really like the bridge, and almost wanted to steal the lines cuz I really liked them.

I think the chorus could be a bit longer, especially with that format, but overall it's a good piece of writing.

[the perfect li e]

I like it!
there are some parts I like alot, and some parts that don't make alot of sence.
Nevertheless good song!