I haven't made a title yet, I think it's a pretty cool song.
Verse 1:
Why can't we look at the past?
How come it would never last?
But you were the one
And then it was done.
And if i could change back time,
Life be like that you were mine.
But life is just not fair.
But like you would ever care.
Chorus:
But I am just so scared.
I don't wanna lose you,
And if I do,
I would never choose to.
Verse 2:
And if the stars did dance,
You'd give me one more chance,
But that's not the case,
I'd kill myself to see your face.
And if I could kiss you,
I would never lose you.
I would crawl to my room,
and think of love at the moon
[Chorus]
Bridge:
You were never cute.
You were fucking beautiful. x4
[Chorus x2]
New song I wrote
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Re: New song I wrote
^ Good post!
I think the song is decent. I like the chorus very much.
I think the song is decent. I like the chorus very much.
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Re: New song I wrote
one word posts......Acoustic Bandit (wiggs1441) wrote:ok
I really like the chorus. I can connect to it and that makes it special.
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Re: New song I wrote
nice
I like it
I like it
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nice one. nice chorus indeed.
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Re: New song I wrote
I really like the bridge, and almost wanted to steal the lines cuz I really liked them.
I think the chorus could be a bit longer, especially with that format, but overall it's a good piece of writing.
I think the chorus could be a bit longer, especially with that format, but overall it's a good piece of writing.
but I know I can't be comfortable in my own skin.
So when I say I'm scared to be alone, you know I mean it,
I'm just not ready to leave my room.
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Re: New song I wrote
I like it!
there are some parts I like alot, and some parts that don't make alot of sence.
Nevertheless good song!
there are some parts I like alot, and some parts that don't make alot of sence.
Nevertheless good song!