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correlation

Posted: Sat May 10, 2008 8:36 am
by yeskia
This is the opening track to the first album I'm writing for a new band I'm working with. All comments appreciated!

This is a story,
a story, a story,
a story I'm falling.

The familiar sound of morning glory,
the distinct taste of fear in the air.
This is a city with a story to spare,
an entire affair of ultimate despair.

Fractions alone make up a whole;
drawing a bigger picture of scale -
it's problems alone but it will prevail,
prevail in almost every detail.

Correlation between fact and fiction
All these tales are a contradiction
Until we've discovered the final details
our society has continued to fail


The forgotten have become dead pixels,
Annoying and impossible to repair:
simply a result of their wear and tear,
nothing can save them, not even a prayer.

It's those that don't matter that matter,
just like we're nothing but a pale blue dot
and while it's not like we've lost the plot
it won't be long until we're all but forgotten.

This is a story,
a story, appalling,
lacking all glory.

Re: correlation

Posted: Sat May 10, 2008 12:47 pm
by Hentaiman
Wow thats really great!

Re: correlation

Posted: Sat May 10, 2008 2:56 pm
by d4rkst4r
nice work, but shouldn't the chorus be played again?

Re: correlation

Posted: Sat May 10, 2008 7:48 pm
by wiggs1441
eesh

Re: correlation

Posted: Sat May 10, 2008 7:49 pm
by Lord Barenobeefdip
Hentaiman wrote:Wow thats really great!