New Song- You never knew

[J-Pan]

You never knew-

Intro
I lay here on my bed
Wishing for my path to bend
Its just all gonna stop
As its falling end to end
Now only you knew---
Verse 1
I guess it’s just up to me
To say the things you couldn’t see
I now know how its gonna be
Just between you and me
Now let me say….
Chorus
You never, you never you never--- knew---
You never, you never you never--- knew---
Verse 2
Now im stuck between my choices
I don’t think I can choose
Now if you can’t make your mind up
I guess your go--ing to lose

You never, you never you never knew---
You never, you never you never knew---

Solo

Chorus-Outro
Its all over its all done
Now I know that ive become
the thing you---
never, you never you never knew---
You never, you never you never knew---

thoughts on the song?? i know the verses r a bit short but i couldnt think of anything else, any places for improvement?

[Kano]

lol J-pan i like it very very cool
but the versus arnt to short its the chorus DUH! lol

[Gibsum 41]

lol J-pan i like it very very cool

well said my n00b

and well done my grand-n00b

[tomhoppus]

lol J-pan i like it very very cool

well said my nephew

and well done my grand-nephew

I made it fit for me i think........

[Kano]

lol J-pan i like it very very cool

well said my nephew

and well done my grand-nephew

I made it fit for me i think........

lol nice man hahah I GET RID OF SIZE

[J-Pan]

lol J-pan i like it very very cool
but the versus arnt to short its the chorus DUH! lol

k ill work on a longer chorus but it only really sounds right (maybe its just me) when u sing it right

[withchappedlips]

What's the -- for?

[J-Pan]

What's the -- for?

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