your sick mentality [working title]

Arcane · Post by **Arcane** » Sat Aug 18, 2007 6:53 am

well this is my first time writing lyrics, but im not too sure if i want these to be lyrics or a poem, but i've always had strong views and slight first hand experience with how shit this world can be =] so here goes... be honest and constructive criticism will be nice

Your Sick Mentality

We were the mind's worst nightmare
We lay awake while the pills failed but
You only fooled our escaped sanity
And that's why they fled
You had control.

Were the drugs ever helping us
Cause you didn't care at all
Confusion helped the others
But im just a number in a database
You let the junkies have it and fuel sick mentality
The white walls only disheartened us

The sick will run riot
And the twisted turn the tables
Cause your cruel conditioning never fooled anyone
You had "nut case" written all over you
Your eye peered from under notes
Holding false pretentions like that clipboard
The true leaders masked under insanity
While you locked the door

You won't understand the change when these words hide a time
When trust in it will fall
And you become victims of no colour
Staring down those same white walls
And hows and whys wont matter to you
Cause we don't want what you keep from us
But you knew that already...

Hentaiman · Post by **Hentaiman** » Sat Aug 18, 2007 1:12 pm

wow! it's really nice! good job man! :)

It's hard to see it as song lyrics though, it's really fit more as a poem of some sort.

But the lyrics are very strong, powerful and ... i have no words, man! good job! :D

Arcane · Post by **Arcane** » Sat Aug 18, 2007 1:15 pm

thanks alot =] i wrote it meaning to be lyrics but it just changed by itself and it meant something powerful as it is so i didnt want to change it, but i agree with the poem thing thanks
:D:D:D

Hentaiman · Post by **Hentaiman** » Sat Aug 18, 2007 1:19 pm

np, man :D
I enjoyed it.
If you don't mind, i'll try to come up with some musical tunes for the song. if i'm succefull, i'll record it and up it here, we'll see what you think. although i don't really know how to sing.

Anyway, really good lyrcis :D :)

Arcane · Post by **Arcane** » Sat Aug 18, 2007 1:21 pm

WOW hentaiman thats great :D but i can understand it being really difficult to fit with music so feel free to change anything around or completely redo it if you like =]

hehe im just happy that its interested you that much!...wow! thanks =]

Hentaiman · Post by **Hentaiman** » Sat Aug 18, 2007 1:38 pm

np, man =]
I'll try my best.
I don't have my electric guitar now, only the classic one, so it's could be pretty weird/funny to do it as an acoustic/classic guitar song, but who knows, maybe it's this poem's destiny to be a an acoustic song :D

So, thanks for letting me change it if i'd like :), i'll try to leave it as it is, and we'll see what will come out, if it's possible of course, it's not gonna be easy.

Zam · Post by **Zam** » Sat Aug 18, 2007 2:36 pm

Wow man, good job!

Arcane · Post by **Arcane** » Sat Aug 18, 2007 8:57 pm

=D thank you !!"! =]

Arcane · Post by **Arcane** » Sat Aug 18, 2007 10:50 pm

Hentaiman wrote:np, man =]
I'll try my best.
I don't have my electric guitar now, only the classic one, so it's could be pretty weird/funny to do it as an acoustic/classic guitar song, but who knows, maybe it's this poem's destiny to be a an acoustic song :D

So, thanks for letting me change it if i'd like :), i'll try to leave it as it is, and we'll see what will come out, if it's possible of course, it's not gonna be easy.

no i think acoustic will fit just as well as electric. depends if you wanna sing it in anger or in sadness

jpinero · Post by **jpinero** » Sun Aug 19, 2007 9:54 pm

or, you could do acoustic for the verses, and then kick in with some distortion for the choruses to give it a little more edge.

Arcane · Post by **Arcane** » Sun Aug 19, 2007 9:55 pm

jpinero wrote:or, you could do acoustic for the verses, and then kick in with some distortion for the choruses to give it a little more edge.

^YER! kinda like in "We're All To Blame" =]

LTS · Post by **LTS** » Fri Sep 07, 2007 8:03 am

awesome

Arcane · Post by **Arcane** » Sat Sep 08, 2007 6:36 pm

thank you =]
i wish more stuff at school could be about expressing emotions in creative writing, i hate all the conformity and repetitive crap we have to do

Hentaiman · Post by **Hentaiman** » Sat Sep 08, 2007 7:33 pm

swish wrote:thank you =]
i wish more stuff at school could be about expressing emotions in creative writing, i hate all the conformity and repetitive crap we have to do

I agree.
I actually can't finish that song i started writing for my band - "Livin' in a box".

I had a verse and a chorus, that i posted here in the forum, pretty much long time ago and i still can't finish that song, or to try writing a new one.
All the school crap just takes all of the inspiration of me!

Zam · Post by **Zam** » Sat Sep 08, 2007 7:33 pm

swish wrote:thank you =]
i wish more stuff at school could be about expressing emotions in creative writing, i hate all the conformity and repetitive crap we have to do

Just like your dick going in and out of my ass.

Arcane · Post by **Arcane** » Mon Sep 10, 2007 9:17 pm

Zam wrote:
swish wrote:thank you =]
i wish more stuff at school could be about expressing emotions in creative writing, i hate all the conformity and repetitive crap we have to do
Just like your dick going in and out of my ass.

ah but zam you don't complain!

Zam · Post by **Zam** » Mon Sep 10, 2007 10:12 pm

swish wrote:
Zam wrote:
swish wrote:thank you =]
i wish more stuff at school could be about expressing emotions in creative writing, i hate all the conformity and repetitive crap we have to do
Just like your dick going in and out of my ass.
ah but zam you don't complain!

You say you're gonna cut my dick and open my butt hole even more if I do.