just a song i wrote for my band. i need some feedback to kow if they are good
VERSE 1
well i've heard this all before
it has hit me like glasses penetrating my front door
and i dont wanna hear your fucking lies
or painting pictures with allabies
im just tryin to get home now
Chorus
and i dont wanna waste my time with you..... again
i'll never fall back down for you..... again
why dont you just open up your eyes,
and accept your own demise and realise
we're falling faster ( your wasting my time )
yeah thats all i got
Waste My Time
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- Instrument 1: guitar
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well thats some really good stuff =]
but about the verse
i would say "it hit me like glass smashing my front door"
and
" or paint pictures with allibies"
coz your one interrupts the flow of the song, but yer i like the style, good luck with the rest =]
remember it doesnt need to be perfect grammar, just fit a rythym
but about the verse
i would say "it hit me like glass smashing my front door"
and
" or paint pictures with allibies"
coz your one interrupts the flow of the song, but yer i like the style, good luck with the rest =]
remember it doesnt need to be perfect grammar, just fit a rythym
