My First Song.

[Noreason757]

Heres the Lyrics to my first song can anybody tell me if its good or wat i need to change.

Awaken The Monster

I don't feel the way i've ever felt
but I know
That theres something dark inside of me
I can feel it grow

ITS STARTING TO TAKE OVER ME . . .

When you wake up the monster inside you >
you'll see whats its like to be so cruel > CHORUS
And in the end you'll realize >
When you look yourself in the eyes >

And then it takes over your body
It takes over your soul
It takes over your mind
And then you'll know
You've become a mindless puppet
Escaping from Reality
You won't be who you used to be

YOU CAN'T LET IT CONTROL YOU . . .

*CHORUS*

then i plan on there being a solo here and then the chorus again

[Tyler41]

pretty good, especially for a first song. i dig it.

[UltraKolby]

Awesome, like the chrous