"August Anthem" - New Song!

[Jeremy Kill]

I finally decided to record some stuff today and ended up with a new song!

http://www.myspace.com/californiascum

[Madjid]

I swear to god you write better music than Sum 41.

[samueeL]

I already dropped a comment to twitter thread but might as well comment here too.

Really really like it. I like how your songs aren't "boring." I make a lot of "boring" music and mainly concentrate on vocal melodies but I kinda love music like that.
There's always something to listen in your songs in every section. Not just muted power chord etc.

I just downloaded EZDrummer and gonna record some songs if it gives me decent drumming sound. I have recorded some songs just using my elect. drums but the sound just ruins the songs.

[fergal41]

Sounds a bit like a Chuck era Sums tune in places. Nice song bud!

[Jeremy Kill]

Really really like it. I like how your songs aren't "boring." I make a lot of "boring" music and mainly concentrate on vocal melodies but I kinda love music like that.
There's always something to listen in your songs in every section. Not just muted power chord etc.

Thanks, I really try to make the guitar parts interesting and different since that's all I really have. I can't really sing and I can't write lyrics without feeling like they're really corny. So all my slow songs and more simple songs are unfinished.

[Slither]

Amazing.

[Tyler41]

so fucking good

[turtlehobopirate]

so fucking good

[keefer]

wanna start a band with me? haha

[Gutter Dreams]

amazing job, i love your stuff.

[Jeremy Kill]

Thanks everyone. I'm in the process of adding to it either tonight or tomorrow afternoon. I had that "burst of creativity" earlier at work today.

[Dan]

I'm very impressed. Would you like some constructive criticism?

[Jeremy Kill]

Would you like some constructive criticism?

Yes please! I feel the current version isn't complete yet and I'm having a lot of trouble with the bridge. I want to change it to something completely different, but I don't know what might sound good. If you have suggestions for that too, it would be appreciated!

[Dan]

What I was thinking, would be to make it about a minute shorter, keep the bridge, cut out another part. I feel it drags for a bit at it's current length. It's probably because it's got no vocals, but other than that, keep it as it is.

Still, a great insrtumental track.

[Jeremy Kill]

Thanks! I'm thinking of cutting down the first part of the verse and the main riff at the end. I might shorten the first chorus as well, or all of them. I could cut out the intro too... there's so many combinations, haha.

[Hentaiman]

Wow, Jeremy, this is fuckin' amazing! Your best song to date, no doubt! I want to start a band with you!! And yeah, it does sound kinda like Chuck era Sum 41.