The Prisoner

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The Prisoner

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Just demoed this with my band...

It has much more of a narrative than my usual songs, and it tells the story of a murderer. It works backwards, from him sitting in prison, to the night he killed someone, and the chorus is part of his testimony in court.

It sounds really good. Can't wait to get into the studio!

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When your locked in the jail for the rest of your life
do you sit there and think how you could done it right
You made a made a mistake, your plan had a flaw
you want to go home, but you cant any more

Now standing in court, the people demand,
Out comes the bible, you put on your hand
You swear by the truth, or so help me lord
I'm Jesus to some, I am nothing to all

So cry, lie, open your eyes
Tell me the truth I have nothing to hide
See you in hell i'm going to win
open the floor, so, we can begin

It was just stab, just one in the dark
But rather than breaking, you shatterd his heart
He fell to the floor and you fled the scene
And out through the night came an unholy scream

So cry, lie, open your eyes
Tell me the truth I have nothing to hide
See you in hell i'm going to win
open the floor, so, we can begin

we can begin, we can begin
we can begin, we can begin
we can begin, we can begin

So cry, lie, open your eyes
If you show me the cross I think I might die
See you in hell i'm going to win
open the floor, so, we can begin
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Wow thats really good!

I liked the verse with the "I'm Jesus to some, I am nothing to all", its great!
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Thanks, that line specifically is a referenace to Charles Manson.

for my band: www.myspace.com/churchdestroymusic

We'll be posting stuff around christmas.
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wow i rele like it
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that was fuckin awesome :agreed:
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You bands really need to learn to post things on your myspace BEFORE giving it out.
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Ha ha, it'll be coming soon, I promise...
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