The first full song I wrote

[AllMessedUp]

well, this is, obviously, the first full song i wrote for my band, but i ditched it because i thought it sounded too much like walking disaster, and i would perfer to have our own original sound...

so yeah... i never got around to adding music to it because of ditching it, but anyway, tell me what you think of the lyrics?

Time has changed
And I dont belong
In your life of
Hate and wrong
I understand now
The lies and truths
if only I
Didn't waste my youth

Now I look you
In the eye
Wondering how
I used to die
At the thought of
One more kiss
Just the though now
Makes me sick

(Cause) Now that i'm all alone
Thinking about the chances i've blown
Only if you could see me now
Im sure you could only wonder how
How could I have been so dumb?
Foolishness has struck me numb
Why is it so hard to find the answers?
And why hasnt anyone tried to help?

But your back now
Will this ever end?
If I could go back
To where it began
I wouldn't say the things
I thought I knew
And maybe for once
I'd think this through
But I can't
And i feel alone
Awkward silences
Have become my home
I think we both know
You should go
Hidden truths
With great sorrow

(Cause) Now that i'm all alone
Thinking about the chances I have blown
Only if you could see me now
I'm sure you could only wonder how
How could I have been so dumb?
Foolishness has struck me numb
Why is it so hard to find the answers?
And why hasnt anyone tried to help?

But your gone again And I didn't get to say goodbye
I can't believe myself
But I feel like i'm about to die
Of all the years that I thought I hated you
I think the truth is
That I am really in love with you...

(Cause) Now that i'm all alone
Thinking about the chances i've blown
Only if you could see me now
I'm sure you would only wonder how
How could I have been so dumb?
Foolishness has struck me numb
Why is it so hard to find the answers?
And why hasn't anyone tried to help?

Time will pass
But i'll never forget
The things we've done
That we now regret
Stained minds With
Un-told endings
Our secret truths
Will soon unfold

so that was it, dont steal it, after reading it just then, im starting to like it again, haha

[iemnaiz]

its so good!

[AllMessedUp]

wow, thats a good review, but now to talk like the noob i am to this forum, :P

i want to put up some other songs i wrote, should i make a new thread for each song? or just post them in this one? just i know on some forums people hate too many threads being created

[tomhoppus]

You could either post a thread for each song, or make a thread like this thread in which you just post all of your songs in one thread.

[withchappedlips]

Do whatever the fuck you want.
Just don't piss me off.
Also, post a new to the forum topic if you haven't already. I want to spam this shit up.

[sprinks41]

awesome song dude! veryyy good lyrics! you really should reconsider adding music to this and using it for your band

[LTS]

great song!

[Shiv]

awesome song dude! veryyy good lyrics! you really should reconsider adding music to this and using it for your band

dats wut im doin ;)

its a ....collaboration??

[LTS]

somone should add music to my lyrics...

[Dylan]

Many interesting information on your site - keep up good work. ------ Portia (Air Jordans).

this is the 4th post i've reported today. didn't we have some sort of mod that made it so you have to have a certain number of posts to post links? what happened to that mod?