I apologize for the length. I just finished the first draft of it. It's not that good, but any input on how to change it up helps. It's not very well inspired either, so I don't think it's that good to begin with. I just needed to write something new. It took a lot of time to finish the draft. Lots of different days of thinking. Probably a bad idea, and you can tell when you see the changes in the viewpoints or what not.
We were the air in the night before the storm hit
The life in the grass before it's chopped to bits
Everything we did was golden
Nothing you can say to me will change my views on that
And you changed your mind like the weather in July
I got as sick as a hospital of all the changes
Of all the choices that you made
We could have been what we saw all over the television
I lost my cool, then I lost you
It's obvious the love that we had
Dangerous, I want that so bad
Are you listening to any words that I say?
Are we done and over?
Nothing good ever stays.
I guess I'm too young to fall this hard
But she's got me wrapped in to her wicked heart
With her sexy small body and her bright baby blue eyes
and brunette brown hair that flows in waves and tides
The torn up shirts cut to her size
and a voice that flies
through my head like an ambulance siren
Or cop cars, chasing a villain
It's obvious the love that we had
Dangerous, I want that so bad
Are you listening to any words that I say?
Are we done and over?
Nothing good ever stays.
And we will last as long as you stay
Stay with me today
And when I wake up I won't see your face
I'll wish for more
I'll wish for less than 12 months ago
I'll wish for less than 12 months of pain
I'll wish for anything that I can get that involves you
And me, and now.
You and me and now
You and me and now
You and me and now
You and me and now
...
It's obvious the love that we had
Dangerous, I want that so bad
Are you listening to any words that I say?
Are we done and over?
Nothing good ever stays.
You and me and now
I need you and me and now
I need you and me and now
I need you and me and now
I need you and me and now
I need you and me and now
This Song Is About a Guy...
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but I know I can't be comfortable in my own skin.
So when I say I'm scared to be alone, you know I mean it,
I'm just not ready to leave my room.
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Great! :> I don't know what about it is great but it still is lol.
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it is good
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I could picture the freaken girl and she gave me a boner. XD Great song 
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You should hear me sing it. Now, THAT would give you a boner.P. wrote:I could picture the freaken girl and she gave me a boner. XD Great song
but I know I can't be comfortable in my own skin.
So when I say I'm scared to be alone, you know I mean it,
I'm just not ready to leave my room.
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Everything gives you a boner.....P. wrote:I could picture the freaken girl and she gave me a boner. XD Great song
Kyle wrote this song about a guy.
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It was about metomhoppus wrote:Everything gives you a boner.....P. wrote:I could picture the freaken girl and she gave me a boner. XD Great song
Kyle wrote this song about a guy.
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^ And that's why u had a boner.
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I believe that to be right Hilgathesexymonsterinbed 
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^ Insane name. Me likey.
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Fuck you all for figuring out the real story of this. God damn you smart TNS kids. I changed the title and everything. Fuck.
but I know I can't be comfortable in my own skin.
So when I say I'm scared to be alone, you know I mean it,
I'm just not ready to leave my room.
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Kyle wrote:Fuck you all for figuring out the real story of this. God damn you smart TNS kids. I changed the title and everything. Fuck.
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Force Chris to let us play acoustic songs.Armorforblink! wrote:Kyle, record it and up it to mediafire. nao.
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I told you it was about me.Kyle wrote:Fuck you all for figuring out the real story of this. God damn you smart TNS kids. I changed the title and everything. Fuck.
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Actually, I said it was a guy, then you completely ruined the joke by adding it was about youP. wrote:I told you it was about me.Kyle wrote:Fuck you all for figuring out the real story of this. God damn you smart TNS kids. I changed the title and everything. Fuck.
And the thread title is "This Song Is About a Guy..." and you clearly are a transexual, like me
He wrote it about my mom
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Dammit!tomhoppus wrote:Actually, I said it was a guy, then you completely ruined the joke by adding it was about youP. wrote:I told you it was about me.Kyle wrote:Fuck you all for figuring out the real story of this. God damn you smart TNS kids. I changed the title and everything. Fuck.
And the thread title is "This Song Is About a Guy..." and you clearly are a transexual, like me
He wrote it about my mom
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P. wrote:Dammit!tomhoppus wrote:Actually, I said it was a guy, then you completely ruined the joke by adding it was about youP. wrote:I told you it was about me.Kyle wrote:Fuck you all for figuring out the real story of this. God damn you smart TNS kids. I changed the title and everything. Fuck.
And the thread title is "This Song Is About a Guy..." and you clearly are a transexual, like me
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I'm dumb, i have absolutely no idea about anything in the above.
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It's about a guy who really misses a girl that he used to date. That's pretty much it. He can't get over her, so he tends to be nostalgic about everything... and at the end it says "I need you and me and now", meaning, he really wants her back.Conebizzy32 wrote:I'm dumb, i have absolutely no idea about anything in the above.
but I know I can't be comfortable in my own skin.
So when I say I'm scared to be alone, you know I mean it,
I'm just not ready to leave my room.
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Cool, good one Kyle.
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