This Is Not My Goodbye

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This Is Not My Goodbye

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about my ex-gf who i still have a little bit of feelings left over for

"This Is Not My Goodbye"

Verse 1
Another flaw in my perception
Like drugs from an injection, it messes with my mind
You go out with them every night, and it always ends in a fight
Why don't you just come back to me
You know I'll treat you right
I go from observing to obsessing, and from obsessing I go to stressing
I try to affect who you end up choosin'
Maybe I belong in an institution
Why can't you just see? It's with you I wanna be
Truths you would deny, but this is not my goodbye

Chorus
When nothing seems to be in line, I do all I can to avoid a decline
But I swear in all that is holy, I don't need another melancholy
Maybe you don't know what you're looking for
But I would never hurt you and you can be sure
When you try for the ones that just walk away
You can always come back 'cause I'm here to stay

Verse 2
People keep telling me to forget, but all I ever do is regret
The things I never did and the words I should've said
Sometimes I think I'm better off dead
I'm so blind I see what no one sees
Every feeling brings me right down to my knees
Never afraid to let me know
The first trigger of your libido
Unlike them, because they demand it
I would never take you for granted
No reason to cry, this is not my goodbye

(Chorus)

Bridge
Now like I said, this is not my goodbye
Just give me a second, I'd like to know why
Why do you like me tomorrow, but hate me today?
Why is it always the wrong thing to say?
I know you're still here, 'cause I haven't left
You always do things I never expect
That confuses me, from the times that you're rude
Why do you give me a fucking attitude?
With this new life, you seem to have changed
Sometimes you can be so damn estranged
But I said it before, and I will 'til I die
You got nothing to fear, this is not my goodbye

(Chorus)
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wow thats good i like
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Me think it's good
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dp noob
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thanks Kano & sumaddict
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kanguv41 wrote:dp noob
what do you mean?
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you opened 2 same topics
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DP means double popst

nice son btw
Dance, Fucka, Dance
N-27 is my awesome master
M-Del and W-14 are my n00bz. Touch Them and I'll....uh..I..i... need to get back to you on that one.....
B-Cor, BPP and K-Mar are my pimp-ass grand-n00bs
S-42 and M-Lov are my great-grand n00bs
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yea i realized that. i didnt mean to. my computer was going slow and i accidentally hit 'submit' twice.

thanks for the compliments though
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I meant song not son......... :confused:


kanguv didn't know what it meant at first :geek:
Dance, Fucka, Dance
N-27 is my awesome master
M-Del and W-14 are my n00bz. Touch Them and I'll....uh..I..i... need to get back to you on that one.....
B-Cor, BPP and K-Mar are my pimp-ass grand-n00bs
S-42 and M-Lov are my great-grand n00bs
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Now I have the best 2 sigs :smug:
oh, and G-41 is my brother
The Offspring is mah bitch!
kthxbai To Hilgaman
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pretty good
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CIRCUITzach wrote:pretty good
thanks :smile:
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I liked it at the beginning. The simile of drugs & perception. But by the end of the song it seemed really pushed. The song seemed rushed. It seemed like you were trying to hard to make a rhyme out of the song. Melancholy, libido, etc. I like the song, I just think you should work on not trying to make every line rhyme.
And I know I said I needed space,

but I know I can't be comfortable in my own skin.

So when I say I'm scared to be alone, you know I mean it,

I'm just not ready to leave my room.

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Kyle_ftl wrote:I liked it at the beginning. The simile of drugs & perception. But by the end of the song it seemed really pushed. The song seemed rushed. It seemed like you were trying to hard to make a rhyme out of the song. Melancholy, libido, etc. I like the song, I just think you should work on not trying to make every line rhyme.
no i wasnt trying too hard. all the rhymes i used do have significance. thank you though
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