Enthused

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Enthused

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Enthused

Intro
Nice too see you again, cling to me, like before
I need this, can you tell me the secret
To move forward, to survive my life
From now on, I’ll listen like before

Verse
And all these ideas float around in my head
All these ideas make my mind sick
So help me
I need to get them out
And I feel that, you can be my savoir
And I know, you’ve never been there for me
But I am, giving you one last chance

Chorus
So why don’t you keep me company
Long past you know you should
Lets spend night like day
It will feel ever so good

Verse 2
And I probably cannot thank you enough
And I’ll make it up to you, I promise ill be there when I need to
You made me realize it, and for that I thank you
I don’t plant on finding out what will life will be like without you

Chorus
So why don’t you keep me company
Long past you know you should
Lets spend night like day
It will feel ever so good
And take me wherever you want
Ill be anxious, but not enough
And always remember, I will take care of you

Chorus
So why don’t you keep me company
Long past you know you should
Lets spend night like day
It will feel ever so good
And take me wherever you want
Ill be anxious, but not enough
And always remember, I will take care of you

Chorus
So why don’t you keep me company
Long past you know you should
Lets spend night like day
It will feel ever so good
And take me wherever you want
Ill be anxious, but not enough
And always remember, I will take care of you
I fail life. Big time.
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Duuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuude Raaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaanch

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i liked it
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Try rhyming more maybe, it kinda missing.
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Hentaiman wrote:Try rhyming more maybe, it kinda missing.
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Post by Living_Life_In_Caps_Lock »

XD lol just had a random thought...it could be like the guys P.O.V on Baby One More Time by Brit you know like have it all rock and whatever it would so make sense if i wasnt on a sugar high!! XP

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Re: Enthused

Post by withchappedlips »

Hentaiman wrote:Try rhyming more maybe, it kinda missing.
You don't need rhyming for a good song.
You just need the lyrics to flow.

I can't find a single rhyme in Brand New's song "Sowing Season"... yet it's an amazing song.

I find a lot of times when people attempt to rhyme in lyrics that they forget what they're writing about and just focus too much on making the lines rhyme. Especially on forums like this.
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Post by Hentaiman »

Yeah i don't say you always need to rhyme, just that i couldn't really imagine those lyrics flow... so i thought those need more rhyming, unless i'll hear it in the flow the writer thought of it.
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