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Lonely Love (working title)

Posted: Mon Apr 04, 2011 4:33 am
by IvanzZ
song about how i'm in love with this girl even though she doesn't treat me right

As I awake with a start
I can’t feel my stolen heart
You’ve locked it away
Destroyed the key
Trapped me in my misery

Tear me apart
Steal my heart
Naïve to think this was true
From you my love
I will never depart
Because I am restrained here
Alone in the dark

Your love has seduced me
Like a drug, you’ve induced me
In a coma, self-inflicted
But to you, I’m still addicted

Tear me apart
Steal my heart
Naïve to think this was true
From you my love
I will never depart
Because I am restrained here
Alone in the dark

Never cease to use me
I love when you abuse me
Now I hold back this pain
With you, I’ll never be sane

Tear me apart
Steal my heart
Naïve to think this was true
From you my love
I will never depart
Because I am restrained here
Alone in the dark (x2)

Forever is a lie
Concocted by my eyes
But I just can’t let go
I’ll love you till I die


RATE and REVIEW and help me come up with a title!
thanks

Re: Lonely Love (working title)

Posted: Mon Apr 04, 2011 5:38 am
by pakiraider
I like it! i'd call it hopeless or actually just go with Lonely Love (i think that's a good title for this piece)

Re: Lonely Love (working title)

Posted: Mon Apr 04, 2011 5:40 am
by IvanzZ
alright thanks for taking the time to read :happy:

Re: Lonely Love (working title)

Posted: Mon Apr 04, 2011 7:26 am
by Wennis
That was good, enjoyed it

Re: Lonely Love (working title)

Posted: Mon Apr 04, 2011 8:18 am
by lisaNL
I like it! :) I would keep this title, it's good.

Re: Lonely Love (working title)

Posted: Mon Apr 04, 2011 2:28 pm
by SumGeek
I actually think this is really great! Don't know about the title but everything else works. Good job!

Re: Lonely Love (working title)

Posted: Mon Apr 04, 2011 3:56 pm
by HugoDisasters
Nice! Some words are taken from Sum 41 songs, that makes it even more badass.

Re: Lonely Love (working title)

Posted: Mon Apr 04, 2011 4:02 pm
by Madjid
Working Title? :hehe:
Are you writing this for Metallica?

Re: Lonely Love (working title)

Posted: Tue Apr 05, 2011 12:41 am
by IvanzZ
Thanks to everybody for the reviews :happy:

And just for the record, I just put working title because I wanted to see what other titles people could come up with, because I am open to change on this title. I kind of just slapped on a title and I wasn't a huge fan of it. Any other suggestions are appreciated!