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New Song

Post by Kano »

hey i wrote this today do you like or dislike and if you dislike make it constructive criticism please
thanks






1Intro (one guitar)

Riff (all instruments kick in)

Verse 1

Now we have fallen
Running and calling
Now we don’t see what you see from the eye
Are done crawling
But is all falling?
I hope you fall down and cry
(Pick Slide)

Chorus

Are they throwing one big hasta
Don’t be scared just run faster
But now where all down
Down
Down
(music stops)
Down!

Riff

Verse 2

Things aren’t the same--
Realy please---
Where all in pain—
On our knees
(pick slide)

Chorus

Are they throwing one big hasta
Don’t be scared just run faster
But now where all down
Down
Down
Down

Bridge


Is everyone scared now
Do they have one big frown
We know why its all around
Because idiots own the crown

(solo)

(pick slide)


Chorus

Are they throwing one big hasta
Don’t be scared just run faster
But now where all down
Down
Down
Down
Down
Down
Down
(music stops)
DOWN!
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Re: New Song

Post by BrandonCorey »

I liked it but what did you write this song about?
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thanks well its mainly about war and the learders ( just for all that dont know hasta is spanish for spear)
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Post by Gibsum 41 »

Kano wrote:thanks well its mainly about war and the learders ( just for all that dont know hasta is spanish for spear)
i speak spanish and i didnt know that

anyways great song. really liked it
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ll i think its spanish it might be latin ( i used a ryming dictionairy and it rimed and it suted it so i used it lol )
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Nice song! me like haha :D
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Re: New Song

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i think its pretty decent... may need some work later but great :D
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