I'll Be Gone

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I'll Be Gone

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Just wrote this one. A song about breaking up

"I'll Be Gone"

I'm sorry I can't tell,
But I think this ain't going well.
You may think that you know it all.
Pay close attention to my call.
Now tell me I'm in love again,
Before you say it's all in vain.
I'll break this before it gets worse.
For now I'll write another verse.

[Chorus]
This rain that keeps on raining over me.
It's overflowing my mind.
I hope that you can find,
That I'm better without you.
I'm sick of what you say and do.
You always think you're right.
You always think I might,
Tell you that I'll be gone

A life that's due to pay.
You assume that I'll want to stay,
But really I just want to go.
There's nothing more that I can show.
You better tell me you'll forget,
The things that I could never get.
Well just say we can still be friends.
I hope to see you at the end.

[Repeat Chorus]

Don't follow I wont come back.
Don't launch another attack.
We've been through this before and we'll be back again.
We'll try to look away but we will always forget.
You'll know what I meant I guess.
It's just another big mess,
But you don't care if it's you or if it's me.
Wait 'till you know the thing you will see.

[Repeat chorus twice]
[Repeat chorus twice again while singing this twice too:]
It's falling apart.
There's not much we can add.
We're saying we're gone,
But we're still going through


Well any comment is accepted. Just tell me if you liked it or not and if you have any suggestions to improve it it would be greatly appreciated. thanks :D
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its yuumy-licious

i had an idea today in school, but i forgot it :(
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tomhoppus wrote:its yuumy-licious

i had an idea today in school, but i forgot it :(
Yummy-licious indeed
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I liked it.

But i didn't understand the last part. You supposed to sing it in the background or like sing it with the chorus in the background?
Sounds cool if it is :D

nice song.
Only i had trouble to hear this as a song because of the weird structure of the chorus, like its first line.

except that, its a pretty cool song.
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Hentaiman wrote:I liked it.

But i didn't understand the last part. You supposed to sing it in the background or like sing it with the chorus in the background?
Sounds cool if it is :D

nice song.
Only i had trouble to hear this as a song because of the weird structure of the chorus, like its first line.

except that, its a pretty cool song.
think of the ending of "No Reason" how while deryck sings the chorus at the same time he sings:
"so how long has this gone
i dont see this ending..."

i do have a structure for the chorus but you'd have to listen to it to understand it well.

oh and thanks for the comments guys
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Gibsum 41 wrote:
Hentaiman wrote:I liked it.

But i didn't understand the last part. You supposed to sing it in the background or like sing it with the chorus in the background?
Sounds cool if it is :D

nice song.
Only i had trouble to hear this as a song because of the weird structure of the chorus, like its first line.

except that, its a pretty cool song.
think of the ending of "No Reason" how while deryck sings the chorus at the same time he sings:
"so how long has this gone
i dont see this ending..."

i do have a structure for the chorus but you'd have to listen to it to understand it well.

oh and thanks for the comments guys
If you could somehow record or compose in Guitar Pro how you hear it in your head , it'll be great, since the structure of the chorus (which seems odd to me) is really the only thing i cannot totally understand, and except that its a great song.
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