I just listened to the song Don't Forget, I think it was pretty good all round, I enjoy this sort of music to calm me down occasionally instead of all the rock I listen to.
The only criticism I have is a few points closer to the end it sounds like you're running out of breath and the pitch wavers heaps, so I guess just work on breathing whenever possible
Last edited by Tyler. on Sat Apr 23, 2011 2:09 am, edited 1 time in total.
Thanks Tyler. I probably did run out of breath. I had sang it 3 times before that to practice and its a heavy strumming song that kinda wore me out...lol
I'd write rock songs if I could, its what I'd rather play, but acoustics are nice as well
I've seen you lost and found Lately it's the other way around And I don't even know What to say anymore
But maybe, there'll be a day When maybe, there'll be a way For you to come back to who you really are Instead of being just happily scared, like you say
I've seen you douse your pain In a bottle of who's to blame And you don't even care It's like you're not even there
So cut that rope you been holding on It's been keeping you up way too long And jump head first without blinking an eye To be re-born you gotta learn how to die
samueeL wrote:I really like verses! I felt like this one had a bit different vibe than your other stuff!
Thanks Samuel! I'm beginning to think this was inspired lyrically by SBM some how, like Happiness Machines. dunno where the music came from, I was just playing around with strumming then started humming, then lyrics came. it went by really fast..lol
lisaNL wrote:I really like it! Defenitely one of my favorites by you.
Thanks Lisa, yeah I think its one of my faves too, the ones that come quick always are.
new one. I have another too that I need to record, but I got caught up in this one today
You say I'm there, but need some help What if I don't want the hand thats dealt It's been so long, since I was sure That every problem has an instant cure
I can't seem to get I can't seem to bet Just where I'm a going next And all thats left, is a mess That I clean with a carelessness
On my own, I say I'll be fine Though I know those words are all lies Falling down, with every turn I often think I know more than I learn
I know I can't, go on like this Not everything ends in hit or miss I caffeine up, wind back down I can't act like I got it all figure out
i found your vocal melody a little too mono tone in a way. i think you have a great voice and instead of singing at the same volume or in the same note-area, really try to explore your voice. the song was really cool and catchy as always, but for the future; push your vocals. you can do it and you know that.
you have far too much time on your hands
"The missing part of me that grows around me like a cage..."
I lack what you call a willingness to dissolve all that is wrong with me I talk to myself about running through hell to get where I'll never be And I can't explain why the tears fall like rain and always leave a stain But I'm sure, it's got something to do with me
Is all that I see, when I lay my head down to sleep Just wasting, into something I'd die to keep I've been to a place, where reality is misplaced I just wanna stay, and watch time get erased
Crossing the line between wrong and right and I'm stuck in the middle ground I'm pacing again, over steps where I've been but my head's spinning all around And I can't explain this headache I've made cause its cutting like a blade But I'm sure, it's got something to do with me
Is all that I see, when I lay my head down to sleep Just wasting, into something I'd die to keep I've been to a place, where reality is misplaced I just wanna stay, and watch time get erased
And now I'm stuck in rut and I'm under the gun but I'm not going easily Cause I've had enough or taking the brunt From my own jealousy
Is all that I see, when I lay my head down to sleep Just wasting, into something I'd die to keep I've been to a place, where reality is misplaced I just wanna stay, and watch time get erased I just wanna stay, and watch time get erased I just wanna stay, and watch time get erased