Another song...

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Omega Myre
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Another song...

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This song's called "Maddie".
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I'd do anything
For you to be here now
Your the one I'm lacking
I wipe the sweat from an angry brow

You were why I woke up to meet the sunrise
You made everything alright
Now that I look up at the sky
I can't help the mourning

Maddie
Why'd you go so soon?
Maddie
Why'd you leave like this?
Maddie
I did my very best
Maddie
Could things have changed?

I'd do anything
To hear your voice again
I wish I could hold you once more
What went wrong?

I know your gone forever
There's so many things
I wish I could have said
I feel like I've let you down

Maddie
Why'd you go so soon?
Maddie
Why'd you leave like this?
Maddie
I did my very best
Maddie
Could things have changed?

Maddie
Why'd you go so soon?
Maddie
Why'd you leave like this?
Maddie
I did my very best
Maddie
Could things have changed?

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This isn't my best song, but...Any constructive criticism would be great!
Last edited by Omega Myre on Sat Sep 08, 2007 4:35 am, edited 1 time in total.
Zam
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Post by Zam »

I kinda get an Emily [Bowling for Soup] and an Addicted [Simple Plan] feel from those lyrics.
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Post by Arcane »

those lyrics will work really well as a song. i'm sorry for your loss :(
but this is very good work
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Post by Lars »

i liked it

sorry about what happened...
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