just a poem i wrote...

[Xx_sum41_xX]

you showed me many signs
but i already lost my mind
i left it all behind
i told you that

you asked me if i trust you
but i didn't know if i should
i had many things to hide
and you had problems too

as the night goes on
i forgot so many things
and everything moved on
but i won't cry now

when i woke up today
my mind didn't feel the same
my head and self hurt
and i felt like i'm a part of your game

you told me not to speak now
i was so confused
i couldn't move myself
he lost control this time

as the night goes on
i have to cut myself
to make it go away somehow
and everything moved on
but i won't cry now

why i can't see you??
your system broke down
i tried to run away from you
the whole nightmare long
why i can't see you??
i feel so blind at all
why i can't see you??
you broke me down at all
why i can't see through you??

as the night goes on
i'm fading away
you broke me down
you broke me down inside
but i won't cry tonight
_____________________

that's it...

[himynameisadam]

thats really good

deep

[The Witness]

thats really good

deep

[Chase]

you told me not to speak now
i was so confused
i couldn't move myself
he lost control this time

Who's "He"?

Your head and self hurt?
Are you talking yourself hurting or your hurt for yourself?
Fix the grammar in that one.

why i can't see you??
your system broke down
i tried to run away from you
the whole nightmare long
why i can't see you??
i feel so blind at all
why i can't see you??
you broke me down at all
why i can't see through you??

That one's probably too long to fit the rest of the sections.

I did like how you changed it from see you to see through you though.
Clever...clever...clever.. ^_^

you broke me down
you broke me down inside

Repetition sounds bad when it comes out of nowhere. ^_^