I suck but I'm gonna give it a try

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I suck but I'm gonna give it a try

Post by Rocket41 »

One Last Try

I tried for you
I did everything I thought I could
We tried to do
Everything that we thought we should
Can't count on you
You did what you thought you should
I miss you too
I did everything I knew I could

Tears fall as another minute goes by
A fake smile has ended this fateful night
The door closes as I begin to wonder why
Can't let this end without one last try

I've been replaced
cuz you did what I thought you would
I can't escape
From the feelings I thought were good
We can't fight
The moments we know were true
I know I'm right
Just wait and you'll see it too

Tears fall as another minute goes by
A fake smile has ended this fateful night
The door closes as I begin to wonder why
Can't let this end without one last try
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beastly
Children of the beast embrace,
To scorn and the human race,
Consume the light that hugs the earth,
And aid the womb in giving birth,
To a group that will appear,
And guide you through this final year,
The dark armies then will come,
When the sum is 41

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Post by Kano »

wow dude i like it the melody is awsome good job
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thanks man
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Post by withchappedlips »

ohai I-Empire.
And I know I said I needed space,

but I know I can't be comfortable in my own skin.

So when I say I'm scared to be alone, you know I mean it,

I'm just not ready to leave my room.

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nice
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Kyle wrote:ohai I-Empire.
how'd you know it was me :smug:
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Post by Bizzy-C92 »

which way do you guys know the melody.....I can only see the lyrics....
We're all going to hell....!!!!
....Cross my heart and hope to die


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Post by Ericuda »

This song would be PEREFECT for the dilema my ex and I have gotten ourselves into if a couple lyrics were just altered a bit.
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Post by PunkSteve »

its great. especially for what looks like a 1st attempt.. nice simple lyrics etc :)
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