Hold Me Now

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Hold Me Now

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Hold me now
I wanna let go
Hold me now
Cause it’s startin to show
Hold me now
Let’s finish this story

It’s like summer
The feeling’s warm
It’s starting to tingle
As shivers run down my spine
But I think we’ll be just fine

Started in June
Under a half crescent moon
Made me smile when you answered your phone
Oh how we’ve grown

I remember the walks
In the dark on the beach
Away from the city streets and cars
That moment was meant to be ours

The feeling can’t be replaced
Promise me here and now,
You won’t let it go to waste

Hold me now
I wanna let go
Hold me now
Cause it’s starting to show
Hold me now
Tell me how the story goes

The air against our faces
Uncharted water, different places
With you around I’m in my oasis
Hold my hand and let’s face this

Bare feet, ocean meets
Between our toes
And it tickles you,
You smile and laugh
It’s cute, that’s the truth
From youth till we age
Every battle I’ll wage is for you

Hold me now
I wanna let go
Hold me now
Cause it’s starting to show
Hold me now
Tell me how the story goes

I’ll make you believe in fairy tales
Show you that love isn’t a fail
Secret messages along an empty trail
Leading you to me

If you get lost, I’m here
Even when I’m not
Keep me in your heart
I’ll answer your prayers
I’ll catch you if you’re falling down
Wipe the tears and the frown
I promise you I’ll always be around

Hold you now
You wanna let go
Hold you now
Cause it’s startin to show
Hold you now
I’ll tell you how this story goes
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Hold me now
Cuz I couldn't even if I tried
It's over now
I guess it really is my time
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finglemaster wrote:Hold me now
Cuz I couldn't even if I tried
It's over now
I guess it really is my time
Came here to say the same. Lolz.
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In all honesty, i didn't think of those lyrics as i wrote this it's kind of unintentional lol. but i hope you see it as an original work cause the lyrics are meant to be positive and upbeat unlike Crash's :glad:
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lol i thought of crash too. the oasis and crescent moon lines were pretty good, but some lines were pretty corny, not gonna lie. and rhymes like "let go" w/ "starting to show" and "faces" w/ "places" are pretty generic, but def keep working on it man (or gal).
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lol i'm a guy. nd yeah some lines are in there for the girl i like to realize it's about her lol but yeah i'll try to make it more unique. thanks for the feedback!
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The lyrics were pretty good, except I couldn't help but hear Deryck's voice singing everytime I read "hold me now"

haha, but thats not your fault.

one line i really didnt care for was

"Show you that love isn’t a fail "
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Nic wrote:
finglemaster wrote:Hold me now
Cuz I couldn't even if I tried
It's over now
I guess it really is my time
Came here to say the same. Lolz.
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Nic wrote:
finglemaster wrote:Hold me now
Cuz I couldn't even if I tried
It's over now
I guess it really is my time
Came here to say the same. Lolz.
this
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thank you for the feedback appreciate it =)
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Wennis wrote:
Nic wrote:
finglemaster wrote:Hold me now
Cuz I couldn't even if I tried
It's over now
I guess it really is my time
Came here to say the same. Lolz.
this
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Sumchuck41 wrote:
Wennis wrote:
Nic wrote:
finglemaster wrote:Hold me now
Cuz I couldn't even if I tried
It's over now
I guess it really is my time
Came here to say the same. Lolz.
this
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