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Candle

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Ok so i wrote this after i found out the girl i really like, liked someone else, it's called Candle (let me know what you think):

When you leave this room
Shut the door, close the lights
I’ll blow the candle in my heart out
And sit alone in the dark

Don’t worry, you move forward
I’ll stay here, I’ll be just fine
Just fine

The worst part of knowing
Is waiting for someone to hold me and tell me
Tell me everything will be all right
Tell me everything will be all right

No regrets, the words I said
They were sincere, guess it just wasn’t meant to be
God’s master plan, He’s got something else planned

It became a game
And endless cycle
The end result was the same
Just another girl with a different name

But I guess there’s no shame
In letting this be known
With my held up high, I’ll walk home

The worst part of knowing
Is waiting for someone to hold me and tell me
Tell me everything will be all right
Tell me everything will be all right

These are the trials of my youth
The story of my life
A crap shoot, do or die, I lose
But I still wish the best for you

It’s like a piece of me died that night
Only to be reborn stronger
Knowing I wasn’t wrong for her

The ashes of the phoenix rise
And it flies higher than oceans tides
The feelings I kept locked inside
Come out and don’t hide
I’ll be strong


A winding road
Where it goes, I don’t know
I brace myself for this journey
I’ll know the end when I get there
Until then
Until then, it’s a lonely road
Shared by broken dreams and empty souls

Maybe one day, I’ll get what I want
We just want another heart to call our home
I’ll search from New York to Rome
What I need, somebody besides me

The best part is knowing
At the end of the day
I’ll find someone to hold me and tell me
And she’ll tell me everything will be all right
And she’ll tell me everything will be all right
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I liked it a lot!It was depressing at first but then it became heart warming
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I want to fly, Can you take me far away, Give me a star to reach for, Tell me what it takes, And I’ll go so high, I’ll go so high, My feet won’t touch the ground, its my wings, That pull the strings, I bought these dreams, That all fall down
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That was great! Like above, it was abit depressing at first, but then it gradually grew more heartwarming. :)
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It's great.
Though it feels like it was shifting too much, it killed the flow with it.
But if that's meant to be, then awesome.

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I raised myself very good,so I don't judge people from their looks,and I don't fall in love with every girl that has a blond hair and blue eyes(which often means IQ 75) ...and so I don't really relate to any of those stupid songs ...

but it's okay
This is Mark Allen Hoppus. He likes long walks on the beach. This, this is travis barker. He likes to be read poetry just before sunset. And me, I like to stick small pieces of furniture up my butt.
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I spy on my dad while he is taking a shower just like everyone else
Mark: Sometimes when I talk in 3rd person i end up calling tom mark
Tom:Yea than he starts touching me and i think thats masturbation
Some people think were idiots or perverts dont argue were both.
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I like it :)
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FuckT41182 wrote:I raised myself very good,so I don't judge people from their looks,and I don't fall in love with every girl that has a blond hair and blue eyes(which often means IQ 75) ...and so I don't really relate to any of those stupid songs ...

but it's okay
Raising yourself very good, pfft what a joke...

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FakeNinja wrote:
FuckT41182 wrote:I raised myself very good,so I don't judge people from their looks,and I don't fall in love with every girl that has a blond hair and blue eyes(which often means IQ 75) ...and so I don't really relate to any of those stupid songs ...

but it's okay
Raising yourself very good, pfft what a joke...
don't tell me my father did , I would really have to laugh ...I admit that my parents raised me materially,but not mentally ...if we talk about my personality,only I can speak to that,because I don't believe in the quote ''I am who I am'' or ''I am who I have been'' or ''I am the way I was born'' ...and I barely listen to anyone else than myself , I rather read books and think ...
This is Mark Allen Hoppus. He likes long walks on the beach. This, this is travis barker. He likes to be read poetry just before sunset. And me, I like to stick small pieces of furniture up my butt.
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I spy on my dad while he is taking a shower just like everyone else
Mark: Sometimes when I talk in 3rd person i end up calling tom mark
Tom:Yea than he starts touching me and i think thats masturbation
Some people think were idiots or perverts dont argue were both.
"i think we're gonna be one of those bands thats around forever and even makes records, even if noones buying them and using them for toilet paper...but we'll still make them because we'll be the best fuckin toilet paper anyones ever used...." - Tom Delonge
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FuckT41182 wrote:I raised myself very good,so I don't judge people from their looks,and I don't fall in love with every girl that has a blond hair and blue eyes(which often means IQ 75) ...and so I don't really relate to any of those stupid songs ...

but it's okay
i'm like that too, this girl i knew for a while but i recently found it she liked somebody else. i'm more of a personality person because i feel that decides if a person is truly beautiful. and yeah its supposed to flow from depressing to a little happy. i'm trying to convince myself it isn't the end of the world and that i'll eventually find somebody
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